When I met with Ozan next, I had reviewed his last essay, which was about why parents are the best teachers for their children, and was prepared to work on his 3 main points of support and style points of rewording the intro and thesis a bit. However, when I got to Ozan’s house and we took out our work, he’d written a new essay on a much more difficult and limiting topic- does fast food and microwave cooking benefit society? This miscommunication led to slight detour of my plans, and I tried to go through his new essay with him. The problem was this time, the 3 points he thought of were very redundant, each referring to the convenience of the speed. I tried to help him brainstorm some other ways it could benefit society, and even mentioned the idea of offering one drawback of that kind of cooking, such as nutrition, but Ozan seemed confused and a bit overwhelmed, and complained about the topic. With that I said we should shelf this essay and go back to the original one he wrote and keep trying to bring that score up, and Ozan seemed good with this decision. Back on the original track, we worked on his 3 main examples and thesis and Ozan seemed to feel much better about this progress we made with this essay. I realized too that as a creative writing major I tend to want to help stylistically more than that should be a focus, but when I mentioned certain syntax or word choices, then apologized for being nit-picky, Ozan told me not apologize and that he appreciates my stylistic advice that will help him bring his essay to a 5.
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